exemplification paragraph sample
In most respects, after all, Woodstock was a disaster. To begin with, it rained and rained for weeks before the festival, and then, of course, it rained during the festival. The promoters lost weeks of preparation time when the site had to be switched twice. They rented Yasgur’s field less than a month before the concert. The stage wasn’t finished, and the sound system was stitched together perilously close to the start of the show. As soon as the festival opened, the water- and food-delivery arrangements broke down, the gates and fences disintegrated, and tens of thousands of new bodies kept pouring in. (One powerful lure was the rumor that the revered Bob Dylan was going to perform; he wasn’t.) In response to an emergency appeal for volunteers, fifty doctors were flown in. The Air Force brought in food on Huey helicopters, and the Women’s Community Center in Monticello sent thirty thousand sandwiches. One kid was killed as he was run over by a tractor, one died of appendicitis, and another died of a drug overdose.
As a teenager in the late 1960s and early 1970s, I was always pretty tolerant about radical clothing styles, but more and more today I find myself asking, “Why do these kids want to look so weird?” For example, I do not understand why a boy would wear a baseball cap backwards on his head. To me, this just looks goofy, like something a person would do and then talk in a really stupid voice to make his friends laugh. Under the backward cap, the boy probably has his hair in a buzz cut, except for one long strand of hair reaching halfway down his back. I can’t imagine who thought up this hairstyle, unless it was an ex-monk. Furthermore, every boy I see today seems to be wearing a T-shirt that looks ten sizes too big for him and comes down below his knees, or, if not that, he’s got all his clothes on inside out or backwards or both! Then, there are the girls. Since when did it become stylish to wear your underwear on top of your regular clothes? Who decided that it was attractive to combine a white T-shirt and a long, sheer, flowing jumper with a pair of huge black jackboots? I’m so confused. It all just makes me nostalgic for the days of frayed bell-bottoms, tie-dyed tank tops, strands of hippie beads, and headbands circling heads of long, stringy hair.
The following paragraphs are drawn at random from my database of student writing. The students who wrote these paragraphs have provided permission for me to reprint them here without their names. Some of these paragraphs are stronger than others. I provide them here not as examples of well-written paragraphs but as a means of fostering class discussion. Your instructor might assign these to be read and used in small-group settings and classroom discussions to discuss what’s good and what could be improved in each paragraph.
Coherency — Does the paragraph represent college-level writing and thinking?
only a barbaric molester of nations, the latter deriving from one’s origins. And while I will never advocate or even be dismissive of murder in any form, I do not at all see Genghis Khan in the same light as I see the prototypical dictator. One example of the prototypical dictator, one who cannot handle control without the senseless murder of his own people, a weak and brittle man, Ho Chi Mihn. And through Ho Chi Mihn we can see one very intelligible aspect about humanity in its current state: power
and essays are eligible to be accepted late. This means that in-class Quick Writes and HeLa chapter summaries will not be accepted late. • All late work is due in the class period following the due date; otherwise, it will not be accepted. (For example, if the due date is Tuesday and you miss class, you must submit your work on Thursday—the next class period—in order for it to be graded.) • On your late work, you must write the original due date of the assignment and the date of actual submission
Examples of well-written paragraphs:
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A classification paragraph begins a main idea and discusses the subcategories of that topic, comparing and contrasting them with each other. Following are some examples of classification paragraphs.
The beliefs and practices known as religion can cause unity or contention, can hold many things in common while promoting very different values, can be as simple as the Golden Rule or complex as tradition allows. The Abrahamic religions- Islam, Christianity, and Judaism- all share a common father, Abraham. Nevertheless, the teachings of each religion vary to such a degree that many wars and conflicts have been fought between them. Nevertheless, most religions, from the Abrahamic beliefs to eastern religions such as Hinduism and Buddhism, promote loving others, living moral lives, and working toward the benefit of humanity.